I think the only thing this could use more of is compression on the vocals. The beat is just a little too loud overtop. Okay, well, moderately too loud. Not so loud I can't hear, but it's still a bit hard to understand what you're saying, not because your diction is bad or the recording quality, but they're just way down under that beat. Compress them hard, bring them up, then do your EQ magic.
You could also chorus any sung stuff really wide and get a nice smooth sound. That's what was missing from your intro, but I honestly would love to hear more like this.
If the vocal volume issue were fixed, this would be the BOMB.
CAUTION: This review will probably be interpreted as being soaked in envy and hatred, when its intention is merely a honest perspective.
Good: Mixing- vocals and beat both sound pretty level. Dubs and adlibs are nice and subtle; they emphasize the mains without distracting or muddling the audibility. Lyric structure and scheme is creative. The outro bit was fresh. The twist was also pretty funny, although... terribly predictable.
Bad: There are many points throughout this where the vocals are covered by the instrumentation (particularly those swelling vibe horns and that cascading diamond drop sound), makes it near impossible to understand the lyrics (without ear wincing) .This coupled with the repetitive nature of the lyrics made this sound like " We blah together, blah blah blah, together, baby baby baby, blah together, blah together blah blah together. " for 3 minutes. With all those internal rhymes and assonance it's a shame they are missed when ingesting this aurally.
I listened to this multiple times. 3/5 stars. Not bad.
*edit- 3 revisions have transpired since these comments took place. The song is where I want it to be now.
Buuuuut I may still record it again- I feel like I can get this whippersnapper to another level (which also completely contradicts what I just said like 2 seconds ago). aight then.
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Thanks Mickey. Honest review, no worries. I agree on pretty much every point with you. It's hard to get my voice to "pop out" at certain spots on seemingly every track I do. I wonder what it is with that.
Oh btw- some of the negatives you mentioned about this song were intentional to a degree... and keeping in theme with the whole Brain Storm album concept- Repetition to a fault.
But yeah, one layer beneath that is some complex shit. I really like this song actually. It might be the one I'm happiest with so far for real, and your review was completely fair at the same time. Thanks homenuts.
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