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Jealousy

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This is my submission for Round 3 of NGADM. I'm open to feedback and criticism so I can make any slight adjustments before the due date on the 28th.


This piece pushed the limits of my CPU. It got to the point that my laptop was physically incapable of doing any more work on the song, despite me freezing a few tracks and trying to continue on. I'd love to work a little more on this, but my ears are a bit shot and I need to move on to something new. Also, my computer starts to melt every time I open the project, so that doesn't help. I actually spent hours trying to bounce this because there were so many crackles and pops (I'm not even 100% sure they're all gone), even with the buffer size set to 2048mb. It drove me NUTS. I also struggled with the noise floor in parts but guess that's what happens with bedroom recordings and a sketchy interface :|


Good luck to my competitor this round, ThaPredator http://thapredator.newgrounds.com/! His song is already up, so have a listen :)

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Time for your review, Harambe. Don't die on me, now.

Stuff that's great:
- The break around 2:18 is wonderful, always love some acoustic guitar. And then the phenomenal chorus sound with the vocals!
- Okay, the composition of this is great. While parts are repeated, they're really fitting and enjoyable with the vocals. The vocal hooks fit together really well and are put together with more than enough variation and background detail to sound great!

Stuff that can be improved:
- THAT BASS SOUND. It's so low and has almost no tone to it, just a slightly blobby bass only sound. Try centering it a bit and bringing out the low mids some more.
- Guitar is buried at 0:35 by the chords.
- Overall mix is generally a bit thin - the instruments aside from the vocals could be brought out a little bit more.
-The ending just cuts off mid bass pattern. Not good.
- Oh. There are some string-like sounds in the background that are almost completely inaudible for the entire piece.

So the writing and arrangement of this is almost entirely really good (aside from the ending), the main thing that brings it down from where it could be is the mix and whatever is used for the bass instrument. If it 'popped' a bit more and had a tastier bass, this would have a really, really strong feel to it.

9.2/10

I like the beat at the beginning. Super catchy stuff. The guitar sounds a little thin, and might need a bit more reverb, but overall the texture is really refreshing and cathartic. I love the bass solo at 1:16, and the vocals are really smooth as always. I appreciated the structural contrast at 2:17, and you lead into the final refrain really well. This is a smooth-flowing, well-produced, well-structured, and catchy piece with a fun, upbeat vibe. I personally didn’t notice any crackles or pops, and I commend you for undergoing the extended time and effort to eliminate them. Really strong work here, man. Keep it up!

Mixing, mastering, and balance
2/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
2/2
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.75/2
Instrumentation and sound design
1/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1/1
Originality and uniqueness
1/1
Overall (how do the above elements interact?)
1/1
Composite score
9.75/10

Nice song, very catchy, and with a beautiful sound.

Good luck!

McGorilla42 responds:

Thanks, Pomic! And I appreciate you keeping up to date with my journey through this contest. :)

Pretty groovy. I love it. It sounds pretty legit like it's not meant for this sight.

Good luck mate

McGorilla42 responds:

Thanks man! Good luck to you too!

It's been a delight watching this one go through various stages of development. Congrats on probably my favorite NGADM track this year.

1:30 <3

McGorilla42 responds:

Thank you, John! <3 1:30 is just for you (I told the same to Jordi, but don't tell him)

Credits & Info

Listens
2,775
Faves:
8
Downloads
23
Votes
15
Score
4.99 / 5.00

Uploaded
Aug 14, 2017
9:07 AM EDT
Genre
Indie
File Info
Song
8.3 MB
3 min 37 sec

Licensing Terms

Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.