This thing is full of emotion! The vocals sound a little furtive, and I know it’s supposed to sound that way, but I think you need to emphasize your consonants a little more because some of the lyrics are hard to make out. However, the lyrics themselves are very good. The instrumentation is simple yet effective. I’m loving the organic vibes, but I might point out that the song has little sense of development until around 1:20. It might be beneficial to flesh this piece out more by splitting the first 80 seconds into 2 shorter verses connected by a brief bridge. The solo at 1:45 is great - very heartfelt and soulful. Some of the vocals seem a little misplaced - such as the line that ends at 2:34 - but overall I think your voice fits the character of the song really well. Not only did you write a song here, you also told a story, which is an important distinction. The minimalism works really well here, and I have no complaints about the mixing and mastering. Nice work, Ceevro! ;D

9.25/10

Very nicely done, Ceevro. Beautifully written, played, and sung.

The vocal sound reminds me somewhat of Rob Thomas or Counting Crows at times, with a sort of wistful melancholy. Keeping the mix simple is what makes the most sense with a song like this, and most percussion simply wouldn't feel appropriate, unless it were something non invasive like a cymbal roll. A couple acoustic guitars plus vocals just works perfectly here to set the proper tone.

A truly excellent job on your lyrical composition. I love the way you delay some of the timing to really draw out the emotional impact of each word and chord, especially at the end. You really put a lot of time and effort into this piece, and it shows.

nice song!