You should try delving into your percussion a little more here. Also, the saw that comes in at around 18 seconds in comes in a little abruptly. You could just be basic and have it come in via a low pass filter, or maybe something else would work. I think everything else is great, but if you had some solid, dynamic percussion throughout this song, I think this would really kick ass. Hell, if you could send me this without the percussion, I'd love to send you back my take on the drums in this.