Nice job! I especially liked the beginning. It had a great atmosphere. I thought you lost it a little by the end, especially the last 30 seconds.
This was written for a villain I had in mind for a story in my head around a year ago. Thought I should get around to sharing it.
Nice job! I especially liked the beginning. It had a great atmosphere. I thought you lost it a little by the end, especially the last 30 seconds.
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