Right off the bat, this gave me the feel of being submerged in an ocean -- the synth, even the piano riff and the heavy notes. When the drums kicked in, it felt like a submarine was being powered... (think the discovery of the airship in Final Fantasy X).
I thought for a moment there that when the drums kicked in, a slight bass track would've been much appreciated there -- that was what was missing. Once again, at 2:21 -- my understanding is that it could've come in and then resolved gradually.
Around 2:59 it feels like there's something looming above the submerged object/person.
Around 3:51.... that piano is beautiful! Because I'm finicky with pianos though, I'd have appreciated a little bit more reverb and a slightly deeper quality to the sound.
4:27: I can hear a slight bass, but something more definitive (like a subtle electric bass) would be useful here too. This was recommended to me after I made the same error with one of my pieces.
From 5:00 onwards, when that prettiness comes in, I can hear instrument buildup, which is great, but for some reason it felt almost anticlimactic. A little more rising tension towards the end perhaps, to convey the kind of joy from finding that beautiful thing maybe? :D
Now I realise that this is a programme piece, in that it tells a story, and it's in three parts. I'm fine with that. In fact, I've done programme pieces myself. : ) I really enjoyed it all the way through; though I still find that the last part relies on counterpoint a bit too much. I hear countermelodies, which is great for building up the tone, but one extra melodic theme and a little bit of chord variation would've made that last section spectacular.
I'm not the best with mixing help because I've a lot to learn myself, so much of what I can give is based on musicality. On that alone, I hope I've been of help!
Wow this review is amazing. I think the idea of an electric bass in my more 'organic' pieces is especially good.
Your idea about the ending - introducing an additional progression and melody - is also a really helpful one. Like you mentioned, I was kind of feeling that this piece lacked a strong conclusion - that is actually something that I have difficulty with pretty pieces in general. I'll b sure to apply your ideas next time I get stuck.
Thanks so much! You have given me much to think about for future pieces :-)
This is a very interesting one. I'll lay out what I like and don't like about this.
- I love the piano that plays throughout. It adds so much to the song. I also feel like it really matches the theme in the author's comments.
- Very nice introduction to the drums at 0:54.
- That guitar at 3.09 is amazing.
- Percussion choice was great. Very suitable for this piece.
- Background strings/pads really helped build the atmosphere, and they are at the perfect volume.
- Everything is well mixed.
- Outro is beautiful.
- Pluck at the very beginning could be lowered in volume a bit I think, to allow the piano to come in more smoothly.
- Didn't like the transition at 2:50. It made me feel like the flow of the mood you established was interrupted.
- Lead that comes in at 5:10 sounds so good, but it is panned too far left. Perhaps try automating it to move between left and right (slightly) and see how that sounds.
Overall, this was a very nice listen. It really fulfilled what you were aiming for.
Good job and keep it up.
This is a really great review and it gives me a lot to think about for future pieces. Thank you!
Splendid track (despite it not being trance in the slightest... Would fall under new wave/misc imho). The piano work is very impressive and the ambient nature of the track really makes immersion rather easy for the listener.
LOL yeah it is totally not trance, and I hope I didn't offend any trance listeners, haha. I chose trance because I knew it should be under 'electronic' and trance was the 'prettiest' electronic genre... I guess that doesn't make much sense.
Thanks for listening :-)
Love the piano playing and just everything!! :D
its pretty good, :) nice and relaxing i enjoy it,
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