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beneath the waves

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The concept for this one is that you dive deep underwater, far away from everyone, and your journey takes you to about minute 5 in the song, where you find something really pretty. What is it? I'll let you decide.

I hope you enjoy!

Note
1. Composed in something stupid like 2 hours.
2. Fun to do a little bit of a longer piece, so that I don't have to be insanely critical over every 10 second passage. My favorite thing that you can do in a longer piece is just have some empty space, like I have around 2:50
3. Guitar is so beautiful ;_;
4. I give up with choosing appropriate genres. This is like some orchestral/electronica hybrid, which isn't even close to a genre. Oh well.
5. Mixing must be getting better, because at the end I have three simultaneous leads, plus 2 pads, plus beats, and you can pretty much hear everything. It's still not stellar or anything, and I'm still asking any and every one for pro tips.

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Right off the bat, this gave me the feel of being submerged in an ocean -- the synth, even the piano riff and the heavy notes. When the drums kicked in, it felt like a submarine was being powered... (think the discovery of the airship in Final Fantasy X).

I thought for a moment there that when the drums kicked in, a slight bass track would've been much appreciated there -- that was what was missing. Once again, at 2:21 -- my understanding is that it could've come in and then resolved gradually.

Around 2:59 it feels like there's something looming above the submerged object/person.

Around 3:51.... that piano is beautiful! Because I'm finicky with pianos though, I'd have appreciated a little bit more reverb and a slightly deeper quality to the sound.

4:27: I can hear a slight bass, but something more definitive (like a subtle electric bass) would be useful here too. This was recommended to me after I made the same error with one of my pieces.

From 5:00 onwards, when that prettiness comes in, I can hear instrument buildup, which is great, but for some reason it felt almost anticlimactic. A little more rising tension towards the end perhaps, to convey the kind of joy from finding that beautiful thing maybe? :D

Now I realise that this is a programme piece, in that it tells a story, and it's in three parts. I'm fine with that. In fact, I've done programme pieces myself. : ) I really enjoyed it all the way through; though I still find that the last part relies on counterpoint a bit too much. I hear countermelodies, which is great for building up the tone, but one extra melodic theme and a little bit of chord variation would've made that last section spectacular.

I'm not the best with mixing help because I've a lot to learn myself, so much of what I can give is based on musicality. On that alone, I hope I've been of help!

4/5.


johnfn responds:

Wow this review is amazing. I think the idea of an electric bass in my more 'organic' pieces is especially good.

Your idea about the ending - introducing an additional progression and melody - is also a really helpful one. Like you mentioned, I was kind of feeling that this piece lacked a strong conclusion - that is actually something that I have difficulty with pretty pieces in general. I'll b sure to apply your ideas next time I get stuck.

Thanks so much! You have given me much to think about for future pieces :-)


This is a very interesting one. I'll lay out what I like and don't like about this.

Pros:
- I love the piano that plays throughout. It adds so much to the song. I also feel like it really matches the theme in the author's comments.
- Very nice introduction to the drums at 0:54.
- That guitar at 3.09 is amazing.
- Percussion choice was great. Very suitable for this piece.
- Background strings/pads really helped build the atmosphere, and they are at the perfect volume.
- Everything is well mixed.
- Outro is beautiful.

Cons:
- Pluck at the very beginning could be lowered in volume a bit I think, to allow the piano to come in more smoothly.
- Didn't like the transition at 2:50. It made me feel like the flow of the mood you established was interrupted.
- Lead that comes in at 5:10 sounds so good, but it is panned too far left. Perhaps try automating it to move between left and right (slightly) and see how that sounds.

Overall, this was a very nice listen. It really fulfilled what you were aiming for.

Good job and keep it up.


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johnfn responds:

This is a really great review and it gives me a lot to think about for future pieces. Thank you!


Splendid track (despite it not being trance in the slightest... Would fall under new wave/misc imho). The piano work is very impressive and the ambient nature of the track really makes immersion rather easy for the listener.

Cheers,
-CO


johnfn responds:

LOL yeah it is totally not trance, and I hope I didn't offend any trance listeners, haha. I chose trance because I knew it should be under 'electronic' and trance was the 'prettiest' electronic genre... I guess that doesn't make much sense.

Thanks for listening :-)


Love the piano playing and just everything!! :D


johnfn responds:

Thanks! :)


its pretty good, :) nice and relaxing i enjoy it,


johnfn responds:

Thank you!

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johnfn
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Listens
835
Downloads
42
Votes
10
Score
3.60 / 5.00

Uploaded
May 3, 2013
2:27 AM EDT
Genre
Trance
File Info
Song
5.6 MB
6 min 5 sec

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