1: You sang this in a high falsetto. Your voice would be better served with a more natural key for you. That being said, your tonality is still pretty good. I realize asking you to transpose all of that into a lower key is a bit much to ask.
2: Drums. Yeah, I said it. You have timing issues... not too bad, but drums are your friends, and practicing with a drummer will make you tighter. It will take that uncertain feeling out of your performance, I promise. I refuse to suggest metronomes regardless of how useful they may be; they still don't replace drums. Even bongos.
Overall, I'm impressed. Did you sing and play this simultaneously? If so, good job.
Nah, my timing would be MUCH tighter if I did sing and play simultaneously. As it was, I gave myself a deadline to get a recording of the song by Valentine's day. You're right though, it might sound better if I actually used my falsetto more/exclusively at this key. Definitely above my comfortable vocal range. My range is probably closer to Bing Crosby than anything else.
I do need to find a drummer to practice with though, that's for sure. I'll keep your suggestions in mind. And, obviously, if you come to Boston we can jam on my buddy's drum set. Thanks for the feedback.
Nice, easy listening. Your have a great voice, and the guitar is awesome too. Sometimes it's a little hard to make out what the lyrics are, but that will definitely improve with a better mic. The one you used is good, but certainly not the best. The chorus is pretty catchy, once this is recorded more professionally it'll be excellent. Keep workin on it. :D
Yea, I think I needed to play with the mic more. I had the vocals AND guitar in cardioid, but I think I should've done the vocals in stereo. Thanks for listening!
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