1: You sang this in a high falsetto. Your voice would be better served with a more natural key for you. That being said, your tonality is still pretty good. I realize asking you to transpose all of that into a lower key is a bit much to ask.

2: Drums. Yeah, I said it. You have timing issues... not too bad, but drums are your friends, and practicing with a drummer will make you tighter. It will take that uncertain feeling out of your performance, I promise. I refuse to suggest metronomes regardless of how useful they may be; they still don't replace drums. Even bongos.

Overall, I'm impressed. Did you sing and play this simultaneously? If so, good job.

Nice, easy listening. Your have a great voice, and the guitar is awesome too. Sometimes it's a little hard to make out what the lyrics are, but that will definitely improve with a better mic. The one you used is good, but certainly not the best. The chorus is pretty catchy, once this is recorded more professionally it'll be excellent. Keep workin on it. :D