For your first
It was good the only thing I have to say to change was the end. (of course I'm not an expert) I say kind of lengthen it where it sounds like it booting down you kind of like "dyooooo-n" (can't give a good text discription) and keep the thuds. That is my opinion and try it out one day, just let me know how it went. (or just tell me to shut up lol)