Alright, we've got some really sludgy, collapsing, rich metal here.
The intro was appropriately heavy and really enjoyable, except for that section of buzz, it took away from the quality, but I've heard that it is possible to mute sections that have no instruments playing to eliminate buzz like that.
Well, guitar tone, as I've mentioned is good and heavy, kind of like a slow deadly something. This also sounds a bit grungey as well, which blends well with metal if I may add.
The bass was actually really loud compared to the other instruments, but strangely, none of the other tracks seemed to suffer, that is except the main guitar track in certain spots.
Before I move on to the conflict of the two, for the drums, the kick seemed appropriate, but the snare seems to bother me slightly, I can't place my finger on why, maybe it's me, but something doesn't seem quite right, but the fills are enjoyable though.
Alright, it seems that the bass and guitar seem to conflict with another during their shared sustains. Anyway, it seems that way, but in certain other sustains it doesn't seem to be a major problem. There are other parts too, where they both seem slightly out of proper rhythm.
The main problem spots are shortly after 00:45, the beginning of the solo, 00:59, of which I wanted to like that section as much as I could, but I can only go so far. Also, slightly at 1:19, but it's minimal.
Also, the song is only two minutes long, but what can you do?
Alright, so if you survived my nit-picking, then you'll learn that I actually really like that solo. It sounds something similar to what Jerry Cantrel from Alice in Chains would consider concocting.
Last but not least, I don't point out every flaw because it's fun, or because I don't like the submission, but I honestly think that you can derive some more awesome from something like this slow-deadly song here!
First off, thanks a lot for the input, man. I very rarely get this kind of creative criticism.
Alright, so I can address a few of the problems now.
The Drums: I didn't use a real kit when I made this. I program most of my drum beats using a program called Acoustica Beatcraft. Sadly, the kits in this program are very limited and not of the highest quality. I plan to upgrade soon.
The Guitar and Bass: Yeah, with the bass, I often tried to improvise extensions of the riff as I went, so it was mostly hit and miss for me. I neglected to record more than one take for the bass track, but when I extend the song, I'll actually plan the extensions ahead of time.
Again, thanks a lot for the support. Really helps me get along.