Still needs some work
At the very beginning, I noticed that your hi hats sound way too fast. The rhythm is cool, but I don't think they fit. They sound way too random.
The 0:08 sounds really bad and out of key. I'm not a huge fan of the section from 0:09 - 0:16, but when that new instrument comes in, it adds enough of a interesting sound that I thought it was okay. Still not a huge fan, but it was okay.
The sweep at 0:25 was really cool and I liked that a lot. 0:26 - 0:38 is good, but you could really benefit from good transition to the next part. I think that the rhythm guitar line is neat from 0:38 - 1:02, but the lead guitar is way off key and it sounds like you play a lot of sour notes. The drums are good up until 0:57 where thy just go way too fast.
You could really use another transition at 1:03. The sudden stop and go can work sometimes, but I just don't think it works here. The guitar here still isn't great, but it's better then the previous riff. The drums are okay in the sense that they fit the guitar lines.
I like the new riff that comes in at 1:19. This sounds like it could be the intro for another song, but the drums are playing too fast for what I think you were going for here.
I do like how you used two guitars, they just need some fine tuning. Like I said in my review for "Inside this Tunnel", you have a lot of good ideas, they just need some work. Good luck on future tracks!
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