the voices sound like pilots
need better voice acting facial expressions and the tone of their voice was way off
Reviews for "Death & Taxes Ep. I"
Few things
Okay, it wasn't bad, and I'm no flash artist, so, even though I think my advice is worth considering, be warned.
1. Voice acting; could have been worse, but it was pretty monotone and everything was done by you. I understand that it may be hard to get voice actors, but I think that if you're going to do it by yourself, you should probably step up your game to the point where you can vocalize at LEAST two distinct voices, because the voices of every character were exactly alike. And I don't think it'd hurt to get a new microphone.
2. Dialogue; again, wasn't too bad, pretty funny at some points, even though most of it wasn't very original, I liked it. Edit your dialogue though, you said "um" at least once for every three subtitles, I'm not even exaggerating that much. Some of it could have been worded better too, and since it seems like you put a lot of effort into this flash, I think it would have been worth it to try and improve the wording a fair bit in those "iffy" parts.
3. Animation/Drawing; Like I said, I'm no flash artist, much less an artist at all, but some drawings could be improved, but I think this is more of a "comes with experience." And with animation, was better than anything I could ever do, but it wouldn't hurt to add some (more? wasn't positive if you had much) secondary animations (animations occurring along with the main animation, i.e. you could have one sportscaster twiddling his thumbs, or even moving his head a bit more while he speaks). I also think that I saw, in that last scene where the 16 ton weight is pulled up and dropped again on the "generic show host", the blood spattered on the wall behind the dark lord missing at the very beginning. It just seemed to suddenly appear about half a second to a second in.
And lastly, while I criticized your flash a lot, I still liked it, in fact, that's why I'm criticizing it so much. While it was good, I really think you can improve it a lot, even if you just fix most of the things above.
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NerdvanaStudios responds:
Thanks for the suggestions. I did just notice that thing with the blood splatter, so I should fix that. Also, I am getting some other people to do the voices in my next cartoon, it's a combination of how overworked I was with this one, and how many complaints I got about the voicing.
-Anthony
great song
at the end, it was the best part
16 tonne weight...
does that answer your question?
good animation but...
i didnt laugh once! i gota say it just wasnt funny, the jokes were predictable and the bits that were funny were ruined by the monotone voices of all the characters, it worked with the lord of all evil coz it added to his character but for eveyone else it sent me to sleep. loved the detail that went into it like the photos but u ota work on your comedy dude! your ideas are good but the punchline was coming a mile off! keep it up tho love the style!