interesting
fun to watch
Reviews for "BlownOutOfProportion4 (1)"
JunkYardAnimations responds:
watch part 2! and part 3 will be up shortly
hehe
okay i enjoyed thiss one better than the last one
JunkYardAnimations responds:
sick dog!
Well
I usually read authors comment before i watch a flash, so i understand your motives behind this, and i shall offer you some critisism cause you asked for it so nicely.
First off, as you already stated, sound and animation is not that great, and i understand why you dont want to focus to much on that, you wanna be a comedy writer, but here in lies the problem. The pasing, voice acting, and animation took out the edge from alot of the jokes. It became sluggish, and at times well, kinda boring. I found it hard to keep my focus up long enough to catch the jokes hidden inbetween the fillers and stuff.
And sure i think dick jokes and the likes are fun stuff, but when everything starts revolving around it (spewing, tits, dicks and gay jokes) it starts to get a bit old.
Have you thought about trying to find a animator along with some voice actors to write for? You said you wanted to be a writer, and whats better practise then trying to work with some people over the net? Not only do you gain the experience at working as a team, you also gain feedback, and a hopefully higher quality overall.
All in all i found it a decent flash, but the sloppy animation and sound sorta took lots of the edge of for me.
And for the record, one of the points of being in comedy buisness is trying to be either original, or surprise people. ThreeD did offer you some serious critism only in a very sloppy way. You want to improve, then dont flip of your audience, even if their views on things are in direct contrast to yours.
Thanks.
JunkYardAnimations responds:
LOL, ThreeD was actually the only one I flipped off on cause it was getting annoying, im usually very laid back and accepting of the nasty comments, i am the creator of junkyard animations so im used to the criticism :P
but yeah, u do raise some good points... i just dont think id be able to find an animator whod want to animate a 30 minute flash for me lol, id be better off pitching a script to t.v. after considering it and revising it over and over, this episode was just a test to get some good feedback... thanks for yours bro! :)
hmm...
Where's the funny?
JunkYardAnimations responds:
everywhere dude, u just gotta have a sense of humor lol... did u even watch the entire episode? theres 3 parts to it
Just some criticisms
I'm only trying to offer constructive criticism and in no way am I trying to insult you or bash your series.
In the passed I wrote some reviews for these series which were less than nice.
If you want to be a comedy writer you need to practice more than just vulgarity. I felt you used it as a clutch through most of it, if not all of it. Don't get me wrong, you had a lot of things worth smiling at; mostly the beginning of the picture show but the obsenities and sex themes got boring quick.
You've got non-sequitor down.
The biggest problem is the plot. I couldn't find it. I know it's three parts long, but gar; I just can't do it, I can't sit through another. Is it just three kids day at school?
On the other hand:
The animation isn't professional, but the amount of work that went into it is obvious. The backgrounds weren't bad, not bad at all, and there's definately attention to detail. I'm mostly criticizing your humor.
I know your general response is "You need a sense of humor!!..." but I don't think thats it. It's just a lot of swearing with sex jokes.
But it's not all bad.
JunkYardAnimations responds:
thank you thank you i appreciate the constructive criticism BUT you need to watch all 3 parts because this is 1 episode, you cant judge an episode if you just watch the first third because theres no climax, storyline or action yet... it was too big to upload as 1 full episode and im really disappointed because people think that Part 1 is the episode but its not even close, please if u have the time watch the other 2 parts! Part 3 is rated 4.3/5 and has ALL great reviews :)