Beautiful art, but the audio needs work...
Visually this piece is extremely solid in it's construction and presentation and it is really awesome to watch, but the vocal performance was very weak and sometimes difficult to understand. Also, since there was even very little vocal performance and really no sound effects, the music should have compensated and it was simply too soft and mellow for the dramatic story that is being introduced. It has a lot of potential, but I would definitely work on your audio presentation for the next segment. Good work otherwise! 8/10