Very good animation.
Awesome work. I hope those offensive comments didn't dull your morale. Ignoring the slight grammar mistakes *I've seen top 20's with blatant grammar and spelling mistakes*, the story is definately awesome and progressed flawlessly. Wrapping the animation up by mixing that with a song by Cold was a sweet decision.
I'll agree with what the rest of the guys said in their constructive criticism. Just a bit of detail here and there, probably a bit of consideration on clothing physics and *probably* a little bit of anatomy, and another animation like this would go a far way.