Reviews for The Last Hour: Chapter 1

[Bezman]

Short and unfulfilling.

Wow - that was short!

For 'jaiba productions', you could use a more interesting typeface than Times. Something more decorative.

And on the main menu, fading out the bottom of the 'play' buttons seems like a bad idea - buttons should generally be one of the most noticable things on a screen imo.

Try being more careful when drawing the stars, so they're tiny dots rather than short lines.

The plot sounds interesting from your author's comments. I'm not familiar with the bible, but I'm guessing you are? Always kinda fun to see a skewed 'reinterpretation' of a popular story.

However, due to its short length, none of that really came to fruition. Nothing happened here and there's actually nothing within the flash itself that makes me excited about the next one. It seems awkwardly cut.

Jaiba responds:

this is one of my oldest works. i want to redeem myself. if you check out my latest chapter as of late, chapter 5. you will notice all the improvements of the bad things you spoke about. i hope you check it out and review again. for chapter 5. thanks.

jaiba

[Fro]

Meh.

I accidentally reviewed the other two chapters before I reviewed this one. My bad.

Animation/Graphics - Believe it or not the animation in my opinion was twice as good as part two and three. The other ones looked a lot like spam, but this one actually looked like there was some sort of effort put into them. The drawing and animation of the ship wasn't great, but it wasn't too bad either.

Story - Again, just like the other flashes of yours you make this nice descriptive story and in your flash it's nothing great at all. I mean it's only a ship flying from one side of the screen to the other. And then some sort of fade effect that almost made look like the ship was evaporating or something.

Audio - THANK YOU FOR THE LOVE OF GOD. I'm so happy that I didn't have to listen to those annoying voices again. I think there should be voices on the menu like that, but the ones that you include in your other flashes are so annoying that I preferred it without them. Music was fine like usual.

Overall, this one makes me think that the series isn't spam, but the other ones make me think that it is. I don't really know what to think.

C52

~ Review Request Club ~

Jaiba responds:

i'd like you to check out my newest movie, chapter 5. i think you'll really enjoy it. you'll see the great process from chapter 1 to 5. and you'll see this series definitely isn't spam. i hope you enjoy it, and thank you kind sir for reviewing.

[Satoris]

Very short

Good animation, I like the ship fading. But I think if you would have titled this a teaser or a short I would rate higher. I'm liking the story though, I love that the antichrist is going to be an alien!

Jaiba responds:

hey check out my newest movie, chapter 5. i think you'll enjoy it. peace.

-jaiba

[X3cutioner]

too short..

i saw chapter 2 & 3 before this one because you requested it for review.
so knowing what my reviews for the 2nd and 3rd are you realize how bad this is in comparison.
i mean yes the intro tells the story better then the animation does but i'm hoping when i view the 5th part that you've actually made something decent.
there's no point on telling the story in the intro, that should just be a small taster.
the animation should tell the story..
also make them longer, you're not going to please anyone with a short animation that's supposed to tell a story.

*Review Request Club*

Jaiba responds:

chapter 5 shall redeem all of these movies, you will be shocked.

[Coop]

Short Chapter

I'd have preferred 'preview' or 'teaser' as the title of the flash, but if that's the way that you want to play it, fine.

I'd suggest that you get yourself a ghost writer, or at least a friend who can look over your writings for gramatical errors, just picking up on how much you wander about with the details on your introduction text. It should read at the front 'A Jaiba Production' or 'A Jaiba Productions Flash' for example.

As for the drawing, try zooming in a little and giving us better detail to the drawing of your spaceship - smaller tools and bigger zoom make the detail pick out a lot better and the result is much more professional and pleasing on the eye.

I'd also give the viewer an excuse to come back and watch the next part - show us things like what these mysterious Jaiba are. Show us some of the plot, without giving too much away and then you'll get people coming back to look at and hopefully be impressed with your work.

[Review Request Club]

Jaiba responds:

thanks but you should watch and review chapter 2 and 3 those get longer and better.