That so didn't rock.
Don't get me wrong, I love to read. I don't, however, enjoy reading a good three solid minutes of scrolling text. Especially when that mentioned text is tiny, illegible cursive writing.
The story, containted in that text, isn't bad...neccessarily. It's packed full of potential. But, try some animation. Or try anything that's not slow scrolling chicken-scratch. Please.
Molly and Tina?
Ah, no. Not for me. Although part of the story line could be expanded. But where's the animation? Or did I get of at the station again? Those of us that can't...etc. I think I'd rather curl up with an EGuttenburgh edition.
Damn...
Well, my first complaint is the scrolling text, as I could read a single word of it (try a different font and colour, so it's more visable). Still, it seemed fairly promising, so I patiently sat throught the scrolling text only t find that there was no more!
Really, I was expecting some animation at least. The start seemed so grand at all, it was quite the anti-climax.
Judging by the small amount of Flash I witnessed, I'm sure you can do better tahn this.
I don't know what to say...
No, i guess i lied. I would have to suggest not producing a flash until you have a flash to produce... when it said chapter one, i didn't think it would ACTUALLY be one chapter... ... bleah. very disappointing.
That was different.
The whole story in a flash thing is a pretty novel idea, but perhaps the text should be a little easier to read to those who don't know what it says already. I'd suggest remaking this one with a bit more legible font before making the second chapter, if you indeed do make it.