First, I noticed there was a good amount of color mixed in with the gray & black madness motif. This just feels strange, and doesn't fit. Secondly, there were loads of spelling & grammar errors. Third, is the dialogue. You need to refine it, and also, make the characters talk less. In a Madness flash, the less talking there is, the better. Just have the characters say what they need to say, with no more words than necessary. Overall, it's a great flash, but one that has plenty of room for improvement.