NEWGROUNDS THEMES PART THREE! (Last part)
Theme: Tankmen
1 day to write
2 days thereafter to vote
Failure should push you until success can pull you.
cool i'm first. i got comical at the end
//tankman//
he leans against the tank
ashing his last cigarette
gun on his back
and a helmet full of sweat
he takes a step
flash back of past regret
had to hold up some innocent
in a town he just left
just west;
the paranoia blends
when you have to defend
what's laying in your chest
the last time he slept
he dreamt of bombs and alarms
went off in the desert
where hidden faces crept
he hears a crash;
wonders what's next
it's a pity
can't remember the last time he had sex
the grains feel gritty in his boot
shooting the breeze
controlled stress
can't wait til he's relocated to belize
bitches and hoes.
Oh yeaaa
Ha. Very nice there Sir Ponz. I think you captured the semi-realistic? super-funny mega-sexual tankmen rather well! Nice execution with the punchline as well. I enjoyed this.
Failure should push you until success can pull you.
Look at this cock.
I mean, LOOK at it!
It's so large,
and round,
and ejaculates cannon.
Shells skeet,
bukkake face removal.
Drive me closer, dude
while salty eyes distract.
They'll never expect
treads closing in
too close to fire.
Drive me closer
I want to hit them with my sword.
Tis better to sit in silence and be presumed a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.
c'mon, Tactical, get yo' butt in here.
I think it's gunna be close between me and Ponz... we need a third to make it really interesting!
Tis better to sit in silence and be presumed a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.
Doesn't seem like tactical will show. Start voting I guess.
Failure should push you until success can pull you.
, ravariel you foccused on the single aspect of sexual related humour and the ponz you went for the widers range explaining the psychological concept behind it.
In the end it's about the themes of the topic, and personnally the poet i think captured the concept of Tankman best is: Ravariel
Sorry ponz, Tankmen is all about inmaturity and your poem had to much meaning (which is actually a good thing but not in this case)
I'm kind of torn here, and not sure how to vote. While I think Ponz's poem is definitely better, I don't think it captures the theme nearly as much as Rav's poem does.
My vote is going to Rav though, because his fits the theme very nicely. If Ponz's punchline had been just a bit bigger, and funnier I would have had to give it to him, but Rav's getting this one.
Ponz - 1
Ravariel - 2
Lol! One vote lost because of too much immaturity, one vote gained for the same reason.
This should be an interesting contest :P
Tis better to sit in silence and be presumed a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.
I really enjoyed the voice and "punch line" of Ponz's. For me his gave a nice laugh while remaining serious enough. Ravariel's was good...but I don't think the craft of his more serious poem was strong enough to beat out the funny I felt in Ponz's. I have a problem where I always remain serious, however I really admire a quick laugh worthy poem at times. Nice job guys.
Failure should push you until success can pull you.
I expected too much from Rav and only received disappointment. Ponz get my vote!
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
Than teach 10,000 stars how not to dance.
-- ee cummings
Blah. I vote for Ponz.
2:2
Go double posting...
Failure should push you until success can pull you.
At 3/17/10 07:16 PM, TrevorW wrote: Blah. I vote for Ponz.
2:2
Go double posting...
You failed at double posting, but you succeeded in making yourself like like an idiot.
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
Than teach 10,000 stars how not to dance.
-- ee cummings
At 3/17/10 07:20 PM, Dubbi wrote: You failed at double posting, but you succeeded in making yourself like like an idiot.
Hah! If nothing else, this thread provides the lulz.
Tis better to sit in silence and be presumed a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.
At 3/17/10 07:20 PM, Dubbi wrote:At 3/17/10 07:16 PM, TrevorW wrote: Blah. I vote for Ponz.You failed at double posting, but you succeeded in making yourself like like an idiot.
2:2
Go double posting...
Like like? My girlfriend is not an idiot!
Nice going :P
Failure should push you until success can pull you.
Also: 3-2 Ponz...
C'mon, I know there are blatant cock-joke connoisseurs out there. Get in here and give me teh win over the enemeez!
oh, and "sword" is an example of what we call in-your-end-o ;P
Tis better to sit in silence and be presumed a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.
c'mon, we can't let this end with only 3 votes.
Tis better to sit in silence and be presumed a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.
Ponz gets my vote. His just appeals to me more. I lol'd at the very last statement.
Ponz:4
Rav:2
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Also, it should be noted that I fail at counting.
Tis better to sit in silence and be presumed a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.
4-3 ponz
my vote to rav. Ponz had a better poem overall, but tankmen isn't about good poetry. It's about bad cock jokes, so rav wins mine
The writer must write what he has to say, not speak it. - E. Hemingway
At 3/18/10 09:04 PM, TheSubject666 wrote: 4-3 ponz
my vote to rav. Ponz had a better poem overall, but tankmen isn't about good poetry. It's about bad cock jokes, so rav wins mine
Really I shouldn't count the votes from today; but as I was too tired to close this last night I will. Ravariel wins with 4 votes to Ponz's 3. Great battle.
closed.
Failure should push you until success can pull you.
Failure should push you until success can pull you.
<shatner>POOOOOOOOOOOOONZ!!!</shatner>
I will have my revenge ;P
Seriously, good battle. I probably would have voted for yours as well, had I no conflict of interest. :D
Tis better to sit in silence and be presumed a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.
At 3/19/10 12:31 AM, Ravariel wrote: <shatner>POOOOOOOOOOOOONZ!!!</shatner>
I will have my revenge ;P
Seriously, good battle. I probably would have voted for yours as well, had I no conflict of interest. :D
hahaha ima guess that was a startrek reference. good battle man it was a close one
Oh yeaaa
Tis better to sit in silence and be presumed a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt.
lmao
:: i didn't wanna put a one word response....
orange soda
Oh yeaaa
