Wow nice

I love the soft playing here but the lyrics really seemed to kick in here very well, While not perfect it does bring its own style and creativity to the portal and I can see you advancing on this one even more, this was a solid track awsome lyrics and nice backround sound to accent the lyrics

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I love the emotion and ballad-like vibe. The lyrics are very vivid and imaginative; I applaud you for that. It has a good sense of climax about it. I think the vocals weren't perfectly in tune all the time...but it doesn't detract from my enjoyment of the piece that much. I like the guitar solo at around 2:00 a lot. You did a good job with the harmonic/melodic content, and I think it's well-structured and smooth-flowing, which is good. I liked the ending a lot. It's very dark, somber, and mournful. In fact, the entire piece is like that! I see no problems with the mixing and mastering, and the balance was rather good. I think that, besides the intonation, the vocals actually did a great job of conveying the rueful mood and emotion of the piece. I applaud you for this, though. You took a big risk with this one, especially with the vocals, and I think it paid off overall. Keep it up, man! ;)

8.5/10

You have an amazing sense of progression, and your chords are wonderful. I feel like I could learn a thing or two from you. Your guitar and piano are well played, and the drums are tasteful and minimalist. I already get the sense of staring out to a window.

I have no complaints about mixing.

A few pickles:

1) For words involving ripping one's flesh etc., more expression is due. A guitar riff? A crescendo in general? Emptiness can be expressed, but those lyrics sound edgy, angry, and need the anger to couple it.

2) I have to agree with alternativesolution on your enunciation. It sounds muddled and dragged through. Clarity could heighten the feelings this piece is trying to convey. If in doubt, try overpronouncing your syllables. Don't do so too close to the mic, but try regardless -- with changes in volume where needed. And perhaps, you'll find a world of difference.

3) The lyrics are generally well-written, but could use tweaking in places.

All in all, pretty solid, even with its kinks.

6.9/10.

- NGADM Round 1 Review -

What I like most about your music is its progression. Your melodies and bass, along with the drums just go very nicely together. And your lyrics are great; you have this knack for creating a fitting mood in your songs to accompany them well! Your intro and ending are both good (especially the ending line, and how you let that fade way ), and your instruments are just used very well.

What could use some work though is your vocals – they are very slow and draggy, even if it's intentional, it keeps the song rather flat, and the dynamic change is almost none. Your mixing is not weak in terms of balance, but the song could benefit from some better mastering.

Score: 8.6