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Story time with Grandma

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I know there are a few puffs but since it had to be 4 minutes long, I didn't feel like restarting it all over to fix the issue. It's just for fun. :)

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__Voice Acting Competition Detailed Review__

Final Average Score From All The Judges - 77

The voices all sounded very clear and the mixing was good... but the acting was very dull and didnt show any enthusiasm at all. Each cry of emotion such as the scream near the end sounded completely fake while sounding monotone as well. You did an alright job with making different voices, but half the time I couldnt tell who was talking because the 80 year old woman sounded just like the young hot 30 year old. You should have also included a sort of soundtrack in the background like birds chirping, battle music playing, e.t.c. That would have spicened up things a bit. I mean... if your going to have a serious dramatic voice skit, you need dramatic cinematicts and dramatic acting. This was just too dry.

So the main thing you need to work on is acting! Everything sounds good and you seem to know how to record things correctly without having any white noise, but even so your acting is much more important than that. So try to improve on BEING the charectecter! THINK like an old woman, THINK like a little boy, and THINK like a homicidal maniac on the verge of destroying everyone he ever knew.

Dylawrence said:

Acting: 31/35
Fit: 23/25
Originality: 12/15
Range: 14/15
Mix: 6/10

Total: 86/100

It's always nice to hear one that's not totally dependent on comedy. The story seemed a little generic, but the way it was told saved it...
It's not often, but at times I could tell you were just acting, and I didn't really feel the story come to life, but it was a good listen nonetheless.

review whilst i listen. :D

the old womans voice in my opinion needs a little more gravel... they tend to twitter (mainly if you are going for a stereotype lol, which is more easily reckognise)
I like the theme you have chosen... dark and epic story. dragons gods. lol.
the little boy is good, but sounds alot like the little girl. very anime though.
i think more emotions could have been portrayed here. you have supplied us with an epic story, and lovable characters to connect with. but you could certainly played with their emotions so much more... I am not saying your acting is any way bad...their is always room for improvement... for any voice actors... i am just stating what i think could be improved. :D:D:D
Your story is truly enchanting. you must be a gifted writer.
and ROFLMAO at the explosion.. its hard to take any ones vocal explosions seriously LOL.
thanks for this... favourited as an actress :D:D:D also your mic quality was brilliant.

Nakoruru responds:

Thanks for the feedback. I actually wouldn't have put such an explosion but it was a requirement. I made this for a voice acting contest I saw on the forums and they wanted an explosion done with your own voice. lol

I'm pretty sure if I had written everything out before hand it might have turned out smoother but it was all improv on the spot. And I'm not a fan of my little boy voice either, it's one that need practice along with my little girl voice...ok children in general.

But thanks for listening and giving me some things to think about it. :)

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Uploaded
Apr 7, 2009
3:13 AM EDT
Genre
Voice Demo
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4.2 MB
4 min 33 sec

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