eh..

Well i think that some of the background layers are out of tempo, & there was no consistancy between them, so it was not so smooth.
But the part after 00:55 was much better, the beat was runnig along with the synth so the melody was comprehended better.
Try unsing 1/4 beats with each other without including 3/4 beats.
Thats all what i have to say.
And keep on trying.....

Best of Luck
Fadious