could have been executed much better, but the clarity and the mastering is exquisite. Maybe I could have seen some metallic hypersquares or perhaps a significant buff to the low end in those segments that I'll assume were drops. I would have also worked in some more prominent build-ups before each drop, as well as some more transparent tempo changes.
Now, the one real thing that offed me in this was the ending. I would have either ended on a cliff note, or I would have added an additional section that would be a callback to the beginning. Alternatively, you could have extended the existing section by another 8 bars or so, and simply faded it out. That would have added an extra layer of interest for many listeners, and it would sound more professional/more complete.