Sounds Good
You're not the greatest writer. And since this was the focus of this clip, there were a lot of detractors. One example: "Now they drain her every six months now". Now now now. Once would be fine. You should reread all that you wrote and fix the minor things. Other than that, nice job.
It's not so much my writing ability as it is my reading ability. I wrote the script and story with a clear head, but I'm a very bad insomniac, which was the downfall of this movie. I read the lines when I was incoherantly tired. My regret was not going back and changing them. I assumed this movie was going to bomb terribly, so I didn't consider fixing them.
Hmm
The start of something interesting, hope ya come out with more and not just storey time ;)
Hmmm...
Well, your voice is extremely boring and annoying. Maybe something could sprice it up...its called emotion!
the only cool thing about this was the scratchy and submliminal like effects.
God Damn
Ok to start off. Kick ass plotline. Nice graphics. However the monotone voice and just the simple reading, no emotion made this movie boring. Listenin to such a monotone voice made me wanna kill my self. Come on put some feelin into it. And get some animation in there not just pictures with mouth moving. Add some music, and after that this movie would kick ass!
boring....
the voice was kinda boring too hear after a while and the story was KIND OF neat but for the most part boring