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A bit long, but that is ok. I could kind of tell that you were starting to get tired of talking, because you would start to mumble a bit. Did you do the whole sound file at once? That must of been pretty hard.
Ryan
Reviews for "Alone - dXs Backstory"
Awesome
Very good job. Very good story.
Hmm
The start of something interesting, hope ya come out with more and not just storey time ;)
k wat the hell
if i wanted to watch sum1 talk for half an hour about stuff i dont get id watch dr phil
this was a waste of time...
school can be funner then this
not 1 bit of excitement through the whole thing....jeez....
Sounds Good
You're not the greatest writer. And since this was the focus of this clip, there were a lot of detractors. One example: "Now they drain her every six months now". Now now now. Once would be fine. You should reread all that you wrote and fix the minor things. Other than that, nice job.
data-shell responds:
It's not so much my writing ability as it is my reading ability. I wrote the script and story with a clear head, but I'm a very bad insomniac, which was the downfall of this movie. I read the lines when I was incoherantly tired. My regret was not going back and changing them. I assumed this movie was going to bomb terribly, so I didn't consider fixing them.