I believe your work is really good. the action seems a little stilted, but other than that, i'm looking forward to the next episode. The show did seem a bit rushed
Reviews for "Gunmetal Black Ep 01"
at 3:38 the roof is see-thru.
anyways good beginning. would have liked a bit more, but i look forward to the next one!
Good overall... but mouth sync and facial expressions could honestly use some work.
Also at times the animation seems kind of... stiff.
Small nitpick: Why does she have those huge goggles on her head when riding the scooter and not use them
The action isnt bad but do i dont like animes, lol then why i am watching this.
I agree with Wolfie. It is really awesome to find someone that still creates stuff likes this with passion and knowing that whenether it is good or bad, it is still something to be proud of. Good stuff!
I am not so much critic but I can add one thing.
Now, here are my thought on the animation. ( I love anime )
For me, the beginning was interesting and kept me wanting more for just some moments. The black and white effect was cool but after a while you get used to it. I think it would've been cooler if you did that effect when she was using her skills in the sky and rest was color. The effect would become something like showing that this is the time a special move is engaged.
Afterwards...
Was it a dream? Was it the future? As far as I could tell, after the battle when she lay in her bed, there wasn't any kind of reference or sign as to give the viewer a way to find out what the beginning was. And for me that felt a bit empty.
Her personal story feels really cliche... Anime characters living home alone... Something I can deal with though but it isn't something that adds to the interest of the viewer.
After that.... Was her friend her childhood friend (another cliche) or just another friend she got to know? The tea drinking part was unique but I felt I didn't have a enough strong impact on the comedy to be funny enough.
Even though it was short, I found the sword slash in the dojo to be the best part of their conversation.`
The fight between the men in the middle of the animation was great! The ronin sign was a bit funny.
THE BEST PART OF THE ANIMATION!!! HALLELUJA!! But seriously that part was very funny for me!(with the old man turning the off button) Nice one!
The sword on the ground was interesting but for me there was not enough hints as to how that sword was a "mystery" or "special" and therefor didn't keep my interest. Btw why was it lying there, is it something that will be told later on or is it gonna be a loophole?
Unless I didn't miss something... How did she get a bag for that sword and why? She was gonna give it to the Mobsters so why did she have bag for it, waste of money? I also notice at this point that around her pupils there is a pink color. Is the tired from sleeping or? Her friend seems alright....?
Funny that the mobster guys has the same hair style. Not a bad thing just a bit funny, maybe a bit cliche as well. But I do find the Bosses "Enough" to be out of place. Feels like it is more suited to a huge debate rather than a short conversation. I agree with Wolfie on the nervous part. The Bosses running attack looked weird and cliche again with the main character taking him out in one blow, pretty anticipated. What was that blue thingy at 08:05?
The ending doesn't leave much of a cliffhanger and not much excitement for what comes next.
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The major good parts.
I felt like the voice acting was really good and it really felt like the characters had their own personality even though there wasn't much interaction between the friends in the beginning, it was still something.
The character fights was also really good and I thought that the men fight in the middle was smooth and really great!
Loved the halleluja part.
The environment was really nice and it really felt like you did a lot of work creating it all.
The beginning caught my interest and was a really cool start, sadly though that it didn't go through to the end.
The animation on whole felt good enough to be able to watch, the only thing that bothered me was the lag spikes i had.
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My review doesn't really consistant but as long as I can spell it out to you, I'm fine :) And as always, all of this is subjective.
I'm also trying to create my own short movie by using Maya. So, as a fellow animator and modelling guy, I'm just gonna quote what Wolfie said.
"Don't stop animating!" - Wolfie