We dont take kindly the thieves 'round here
lol... very entertaining. Keep up the great work :D
- Faust
Reviews for "A Paper Mario Story"
SyuleeArbe responds:
Haha, I'm glad you liked it. I'll try and make the next one even better. I was tempted to right this response in html, because I'm a rebel.
It was cool!
I liked it. You've got some funny lines in here. Are you going to make more? If so, I'd say fix the sound quality for the music. Tgat's all really, other than that. It was cool.
SyuleeArbe responds:
I'm thinking of writing the script for the 2nd this week, but I can try and make the sounds better because this one was just compressed to much :c.
I also just put a better version up on my profile if you wanna check that one out.
Paper mario is legit
The writing was pretty terrible. I didnt laugh at all, if it was supposed to be funny.
But you still manged to entertain me with great paper mario sprites and sounds...enough for me to watch the whole thing.
I was kind of hoping for an explanation for why they thought he was a thief and what he did, and why the shy guy is so awesome at everything, and why you chose the forest guy as the bad guy, and explain where they were in the paper mario world, etc...
If you continue with this and make a series out of it, i recommend better writing. you need a better story, plot and script.
but the sprites, sound, graphics, style, etc were all good!
SyuleeArbe responds:
It uh, was kinda supposed to be. But I guess I can't make everyone laugh. I guess I did my job if you still liked it. I left stuff out so it would leave you wondering and maybe want to watch the next but I probably left out too much :/. I'll rework my ideas and see what I can do.
It's okay...
I'm sure once the plot shows itself it will be a lot more interesting.
SyuleeArbe responds:
Yeah this one was sort of just to introduce the characters and setting, so I could add on to it without having odd ends everywhere. I'm still pretty new to writing, but its a lot of fun.