Funny
This flash is quite funny. Fro singing in the menu is really priceless. ^^
The jokes are pretty good and they gave me a good laugh or two. But I think the "laughing scene" where the president and that other guy are laughing is too long. It's funny when they laugh together for some seconds, but that's really enough. No need to drag this scene out for what felt like 5 minutes. >_>
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"But I think the "laughing scene" where the president and that other guy are laughing is too long. It's funny when they laugh together for some seconds, but that's really enough. No need to drag this scene out for what felt like 5 minutes. >_>"
Haha i though it was really funny that :p
but well, dont know :p
THanks for reviewing!
Good, but can be funnier...
Overall this is a decent submission. I got a laugh or two from it, so I suppose it has some OK jokes. It's fun to watch, has its moments and kept me interested all the way through, so yeah, good job ^^.
The graphics were alright, although at times they did seem very sketchy/messy, for example the background in Scene 2 wasn't drawn too well. Some of the characters were drawn pretty well though, and graphics overall were above average. Some small details and fine-tuning can also make this submission look neater, like for example in the menu, instead of making randomly positioned writing around the screen, add menu buttons under each other with neater text. Small details like this could really do wonders to this submission.
Animation needs a bit more work though. Lip sync could do with some touching up, there needs to be more facial expressions and hand gestures, and, well, what I'm trying to say is, we need moar animation. Some parts seem a little weird, like when that US army soldier ran around like a madman. When he ran away from the camera, instead of shrinking into the distance, when he went a little far away from the camera, all he did was disappear, if you get what I mean.
As for the concept, a little weird at times, but in all it was pretty original. The story progressed quite quickly with some random aspects, such as the news on TV coming out of nowhere, and the easter egg which has little to do with the story, so the story wasn't really too special. The humour section is where I have quite a bit to talk about. When the flash started, the jokes were bland and there weren't many. As I kept watching, I laughed a little, such as in the evil laughter part, and on TV with the chicken and the Uzbek, and the Olympics. The 'Obviously not made in Uzbekistan' written on the TV was quite funny too.
My biggest issue with the jokes would be that you could've done more with the jokes and added more. For example, in the beginning, you could have added more jokes for sure, and another example would be the Easter Egg. It really wasn't too funny, and for an Easter Egg, was disappointing. The evil laughter part was alright, but was pretty stupid, and I think you could've taken that opportunity to make a good joke. Instead of keeping them laughing all on their own without anything happening, you could have made something happen while they were laughing,. The different camera angles was a nice touch, though.
There were a few spelling and grammar mistakes which, although didn't really do anything to ruin the submission, won't hurt to be fixed. Some examples of grammar mistakes would be in the beginning:
"How many gold do you want?"
It should be how MUCH gold, since gold is uncountable.
"me to"
It should be me TOO, since to is a preposition.
There were also parts where the subtitles weren't equal to what they were actually saying, especially in the interview with the U.S. soldier. Sure these are small defects and nitpicks, but if you don't fix them, it's like making the flash look like you did it in a hurry and couldn't bother fixing these small mistakes, which gives a bad impression, IMO. Wow, I'm an assy critic xD.
The audio was fine. There wasn't really any background music in the submission, but Fro singing at the beginning made me laugh xD. Fro is a natural singer *Cough*...... aaaanyway... the voice acting on the whole was fine, although what's weird about the voice acting is that some of the voices are quiet while some are loud, maybe because of Nick and Fro both using different mikes or something. There was a good range of different voices, and the voice of the U.S. soldier and the person selling the gold/cotton at the beginning were well done. Some of the other voices were a little dull and need more life to them though, but overall, voice acting was fine.
In general, this is an above-average submission which I enjoyed watching. Some parts could use some work, but this is fun to watch, and I liked it overall. Keep up the good work!
8/10
4/5
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Yeah thanks, glad you like the jokes :P
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I rushed a little in someparts, because i though they were so important but yes, not all has an awesome quality :P
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Yes the idea of the guy from army was that he jumped and fall from a cliff :P it wasnt really well animated you are right :P
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Haha thanks, yeah not everyone like the jokes but i am happy that most of people like them :D I think the story is really nice to :P
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Yes but the funny thing of the laughing part it was that they keep laughing for a long time :P, well i think that is the funny part of that...
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Haha i told fro to CORRECT THE MISTAKES! he knows that is not my native language english :P Tell him he made that mistake lol :P
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Yes the problem with the subtitles is that Fro made them Haha no, the problem is that when he recorded he changed some words but then he didnt correct them when he send me again the script with the grammar correction (because i suck in english as you can see).
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Yes, i think that the soldier and the first uzbek that appear are the best ones :P i am agree with you.
9° Great thanks a lot for the HUGE review :P All in this review will be usefull for my next video :P
THANKS A LOT :P
Not bad
I'd say that this is a decent looking piece, but you could do with refining the animation a little more. Also, tell Fro to get a better mic, as the quality does suffer a little there, but it might just be that you've turned to volume up too much. I think that the sound quality can be improved, but not as much as the animation can. Fro just needs practice on more "generic Russian" voices.
Regarding the animation, perhaps it would be better to zoom in to the drawing and from there get better control over the drawing. When you zoom back out, it will look a lot better and more detailed. The way that the Uzbek's chin shape gets rather fat when he laughs just seems wrong. If you were to draw a few lines where his chins protray more rolls of fat there, the detail level would simply improve so much.
I think that you need to use something slightly smaller to draw with as well, as the large lines just take so much away from the image quality. Making this adjustment will certainly help your drawing style. Do you have a tablet? If not, I'd certainly recommend one for you, as it will help.
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Oks thanks a lot, i use big lines but then i small the size... the problem was with the zooms
Thanks for reviewgin and i will tell fro... but for me is ok dont know :P
Thanks
notbad
~~REVIEW~~
Well notbad the characters are decent the story is actually notbad and it has some decent humor fro did a good job i thought lol, but from what you have here i thought it was a decently made and mildly entertaining, so nice job all around
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Add abit more humor in there it was ok but could use some more
~~OVERALL~~
A decent story and somewhat funny but needs more
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"Add abit more humor in there it was ok but could use some more"
Yeah at the beggining is not good, but later is awesome :P you need to accept that lol
Thanks for reviewing!
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Well... I'll be as nice as i can to this one.
The timing for the mouths where done fine, but i'd work on making them a bit more fluid and human like. I know it's difficult to animate so i wont rag on this too hard.
The jokes, well they where a little lame at parts but it had it's moments, but the part when they where talking about the cotton seemed to go off onto another tangent and i couldn't tell if they where talking about gold or cotton. Though the cookie thing was nice, though the timing of the joke could use a little bit of work.
Okay, now for fro. Well.... You're mic isn't the best of quality i read in another review, so i wont comment on that part. But it felt very robotic, and bored. like you didn't really want to be doing the voice acting of this. So i'd say work on your articulation, as well as accents. I don't want to sound mean, just wanting to be helpful...
Anyways, keep on trying =3
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