Reviews for Uzbekistan

[Animith]

Review Request Club

The drawing in general was alright, though some of the backgrounds were a little sparse. Loved the first background with the bullet-holes in the wall, would have been nice to see that extended to some of the other backgrounds. It's just those little details that can really help improve the submission. And you can also use it to add humour, such as the "Obviously not made in Uzbekistan" scrawled on the TV.

The animation again, was a little static. But the lip sync was a little better than last time, and the drawings themselves as well as the changes in scenes helped it be less of a problem than it was in one of your last flashes. Even just having a few arm gestures or people moving in the background would improve this flash greatly, and again can be a great scope for potential additional humour.

The humour there was was good...but maybe a little few and far between? You could have thrown a few more jokes in there, I think. And especially if you did a few joikes within the drawing and animations, this flash could have been even funnier. Though it definitely had its fun points...I'm not sure a single person wouldn't find the singing at the very start very much epic, and the jokes about the gold/cotton I found perhaps more funny than I should have. The laughing scene was perhaps a little overdrawn, but I guess that's a matter of perspective.

In general, there's a marked improvement on the last flash (The one based on 21 Guns is what I'm really linking to, here), so I'd just say keep going in this direction and you'll definitely keep heading in the right direction. just keep it up!

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MonoFlauta responds:

"the backgrounds were a little sparse."

Yeah i didnt care a lot about that.

"And you can also use it to add humour, such as the "Obviously not made in Uzbekistan" scrawled on the TV."

Yes that would help the backgrounds :P

"The animation again, was a little static. But the lip sync was a little better than last time, and the drawings themselves as well as the changes in scenes helped it be less of a problem than it was in one of your last flashes. Even just having a few arm gestures or people moving in the background would improve this flash greatly, and again can be a great scope for potential additional humour."

Yes it will improve a bit each time lol :P

"The humour there was was good...but maybe a little few and far between? You could have thrown a few more jokes in there, I think. And especially if you did a few joikes within the drawing and animations, this flash could have been even funnier. Though it definitely had its fun points...I'm not sure a single person wouldn't find the singing at the very start very much epic, and the jokes about the gold/cotton I found perhaps more funny than I should have. The laughing scene was perhaps a little overdrawn, but I guess that's a matter of perspective."

Yes a lot of people think that, but it has it stronges jokes :P

"In general, there's a marked improvement on the last flash (The one based on 21 Guns is what I'm really linking to, here), so I'd just say keep going in this direction and you'll definitely keep heading in the right direction. just keep it up!"

Oks thanks a lot for reviewing!!!

[Ericho]

Happy Halloween, I guess

I know little about Uzbekistan. In fact, I think the only places where I heard it was when "Borat" made fun of it, or the fact that I used to work in this one place with a person who was from Uzbekistan. Due to this, I was not able to understand if you really understood the country and the humor was spot-on. I can, however, conclude that you probably do and this was fairly good. The funniest part was probably when the Uzbek was running around chasing the chicken. The animation was not too bad and it kind of reminded me of "South Park".

MonoFlauta responds:

Great, glad you like it :)

[Coop]

Not bad

I'd say that this is a decent looking piece, but you could do with refining the animation a little more. Also, tell Fro to get a better mic, as the quality does suffer a little there, but it might just be that you've turned to volume up too much. I think that the sound quality can be improved, but not as much as the animation can. Fro just needs practice on more "generic Russian" voices.

Regarding the animation, perhaps it would be better to zoom in to the drawing and from there get better control over the drawing. When you zoom back out, it will look a lot better and more detailed. The way that the Uzbek's chin shape gets rather fat when he laughs just seems wrong. If you were to draw a few lines where his chins protray more rolls of fat there, the detail level would simply improve so much.

I think that you need to use something slightly smaller to draw with as well, as the large lines just take so much away from the image quality. Making this adjustment will certainly help your drawing style. Do you have a tablet? If not, I'd certainly recommend one for you, as it will help.

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MonoFlauta responds:

Oks thanks a lot, i use big lines but then i small the size... the problem was with the zooms
Thanks for reviewgin and i will tell fro... but for me is ok dont know :P
Thanks

[XwaynecoltX]

notbad

~~REVIEW~~
Well notbad the characters are decent the story is actually notbad and it has some decent humor fro did a good job i thought lol, but from what you have here i thought it was a decently made and mildly entertaining, so nice job all around

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Add abit more humor in there it was ok but could use some more

~~OVERALL~~
A decent story and somewhat funny but needs more

~X~

MonoFlauta responds:

"Add abit more humor in there it was ok but could use some more"

Yeah at the beggining is not good, but later is awesome :P you need to accept that lol

Thanks for reviewing!

[Kirbyfemur]

Cookies

Well... I'll be as nice as i can to this one.

The timing for the mouths where done fine, but i'd work on making them a bit more fluid and human like. I know it's difficult to animate so i wont rag on this too hard.

The jokes, well they where a little lame at parts but it had it's moments, but the part when they where talking about the cotton seemed to go off onto another tangent and i couldn't tell if they where talking about gold or cotton. Though the cookie thing was nice, though the timing of the joke could use a little bit of work.

Okay, now for fro. Well.... You're mic isn't the best of quality i read in another review, so i wont comment on that part. But it felt very robotic, and bored. like you didn't really want to be doing the voice acting of this. So i'd say work on your articulation, as well as accents. I don't want to sound mean, just wanting to be helpful...

Anyways, keep on trying =3

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MonoFlauta responds:

Oks thanks a lot... fan of Kevin Bacon?
lol

Thanks for reviewing :P