What the shit is this shit?
Okay, I would go off and insult you as much as I could but instead I'll give you some suggestions
1 - Make the text easier to read
2 - This flash only has 2 frames. No flash game/movie should be that short
3 - Cut out the background on the anime character
4 - Add more scenes
Thats about it
You did...
You did do pourly.
To offer some criticism...
Don't post something unless it is complete. You're just wasting space on newgrounds if you post something that doesn't work/ isn't complete. The Purple circle in the background is really distracting and the text is almost impossible to read. And using a solid rectangular image is not a very effective way of representing a character. If you want to use static images, make sure that image takes up the whole screen, otherwise it just looks like you copy/pasted an image into your background (which I think you probably did).
Improvements you should make:
Where do I start? First, make this longer. This is almost in the spam category because it doesn't really have any content. Second, some of the text became hard to see due to a background picture of the same color. Third, make this more fun to play. I understand this is a demo, so you should really follow these ideas to reach the full potential this game has. I'm looking forward to seeing the finished product.
Absolutely awful.
This is terrible, I hate being a jerk and all but there is only three possible conversations with no story, please, don't continue with these unless it is some kind of joke.