Reviews for Voyage Ep1: Departure

[CrazyTosser]

Did not understand the ending at all

Other than that, good job. Of course you could've made the pace a little quicker and maybe kept the whole thing down to lowest saturated tones, unlike with what you did with the galaxy image and the red ocean. Another thing you could do is make static frames not cycles of 2 drawn frames, but those of 3 or 4, to make it look less like flickering (type in Blue Rabbit into NG search to see a really good example of tablet animations). Maybe device a better story line, and maybe make the next episode not so dark and joyless? I mean, most of us teenagers get enough of that stuffed in our face in every step of the way in real life... We need an escape :P

Keep animating, you got some good potential :)

SmilingJoe343 responds:

Well did I not tell you that this ISN'T a comedy? I know that the animation isn't perfect, but I was never really going for static frames. Next episode, I'll make it a bit more subtle though. Also with the red ocean thing. I made it bright because it was a hallucination. It's supposed to stick out! Thanks for the review. Oh, and the next episode isn't going to be quite as depressing.

[manic2man]

Headache...

I loved the animation, but I had to mute the sound because the 'music' (or whatever you call that) was just so goddamn annoying it gave me a headache.

[happylobster]

Mr. Cumberdale will be most disquieted.

It's intense, and the work shows. But this sure plays a lot like Saladfingers: The Origin. Does something rust underwater that explains the fetish?

Seriously, I'd like to see more that makes me like the main character. What's unique about him? What makes him someone to care about? It doesn't have to be funny. But if you just make him a victim, people will just say, "Sucks to be him" and move on to the next Flash. I think you want more than that, and your skills suggest you can do more.

[Fissile]

weird

and creepy? Kept me interested, although there better be some actual developement in the next or it'll be pretty obvious this was all a sham.

[zlxq3000]

Pretty interesting

I'd kind of like to see where this is going, exactly.

I only gave you a 7 because A. It wasn't the greatest animation ever (which wasn't really needed for this kind of thing, I guess), and B. I didn't care for the ending much. Him just getting on the boat would've been enough, I think.

I almost downvoted you because of your use of text instead of vocals, but I think that the text actually works better in this situation, so it's fine.

Looking forward to more from you.