As others have mentioned, it's the lack of recording quality that is killing the quality of this song. I want to love what you've written, but the recording quality is making that difficult.
The other thing wrong with your song is the lack of a good bass line. Most compositions NEED a good bass line to have adequate substance. Any bass that is in your song is almost impossible to hear.
Thank you for the review, but frankly the song is supposed to sound like that in my eyes, so suck as it may, it's the way it is.
The quality of this song could at least be higher. If you are doing this in an enclosed environment then you could have brought the microphone a lot closer so it would record it at a louder volume. That and hearing outside sounds such as light static and some breathing and possible tapping and the door at the end don't help this very much sadly.
The bass sounds really nice here along with the drums to create at an atmospheric tune so it goes well. The guitar playing was very smooth and was a good idea although instead of sudden silence from the guitar you could let their be a couple of long notes instead.
Overall, needs to be recorded in higher quality.
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Alright. You actually recorded this? Cool. Could be a bit better though...
The good:
-You have some cool ideas with this.
-The ending is also fairly cool.
The not-so-good: Ok, sorry, going to have to be a bit mean here.
-The mixing and recording quality is very low - I'd suggest using a DAW of some kind and using that to sequence your tune, as well as using a better microphone and recording area so there's not so much background noise.
-The introduction seems to be in a different key than the guitar, causing a bit of disconnection.
-There is no bass, except in the beginning - and even that is fairly quiet and difficult to detect.
Main ways to improve this:
-Get something to sequence and mix this in.
-Use a better microphone or make solely on the computer for higher quality.
I really don't have much more I can comment on, the extremely poor mixing and recording quality is mainly what brings this down - if you get that down, I'll comment more on the song itself.
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