Reviews for Emo Girl

[RulerofChaos]

Not bad

Your flash has potential. It has appropriate music and I think your flash has a good idea, showing people how people with low self-esteem or depression, etc. feel on a day-to-day basis. I would only suggest a few things that you could add (they're just simple problems, though, so you've probably heard them before): a preloader, an ending, and a story (not necessarily anything super long, just a bit of storyline and maybe a little background description on your character). I'm saying this mostly because the loop startled me (I thought there was more until I realized it simply looped). Other than that, great job!

carolshki27 responds:

i am planning to put a preloader..i finished the storyline and plus ive also finished making the flash..im just waiting for my uncle to install adobe flash cs4 since i only used movie maker in making this flash..

[bigholzky]

Highly Impressive Inaugural Flash

While the lack of a preloader and replay button hinder it somewhat, it seems like plenty of people have told you that already, so just keep learning until you get those techniques down.

As for style, it was good and a bit more unique than usual, albeit rudimentary. If you were to practice on polishing it up just a bit, it would be beneficial.

The music flowed well, and fit the mood of the scenes., and sounds effects would be useless in this type of work.

However, the length of this piece negatively affects it. Were part two a bit longer, it would be great.

However, if this is your first entry, I am sure you will only make better and better submissions. I greatly look forward to the next batch of your work. Keep it up.

carolshki27 responds:

thank u..i will do my best next time

[Gas-Mask-Ninja]

not bad

pretty good art and all. you have potential, but you didn't use all of it here. kinda shows what goes on inside the minds of depressed people though. kinda tough to read at times, but you can figure it out more or less. one thing though, you should have added the NG preloader, just to make it have a buffer for those on slower computers, and so it would'nt loop. i would have given you a higher score, but i think you probably could have made it a little better than this. or maybe you haven't really had flash that long...what do i know? learn a bit of simple actionscript (button functions, start/stop) and you can make great work with time. looking forward to your development as a flash artist!

carolshki27 responds:

thanks for the encouragemnt there but im still learning..hehe

[Malade12]

Prety Nice

Actually you draw pretty well, the animation was ok, still it lacks a punchline, a story, something. And there was that loop, I watched twice because I expected some kind of end XD

carolshki27 responds:

hehe..whew..sorry about the loop..im still learning :) there is a story behind this and its done..it just doesnt have a preloader etc etc..hehe

[charlieunicornrocks2]

Pretty good

Seems a tad bit shakey which makes it kinda hard to pay attention to for me but i like it a lot and well done!
I would maybe change the font or make it a bit bigger cause its kinda hard to see.
I dont see a whole lot that is really wrong just needs some fine tuning and could be a master piece of the top 50 =) keep working hard and youll get there easy ;)
cheers!

carolshki27 responds:

i will do my best..im still learning on how to make a preloader and a replay button. :)) emo girl 2 is done but it still doesnt have a preloader