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Reviews for "2 - The Story of Khale"

Meh...

It's interesting... I love "Gangsta Bean", but this totally didn't work for me.
Even the trailer was way cooler than this.

The main thing, for me, was the tone - it was childish, which was hard for me to get into, but then it turns around and becomes semi-grown-up where the narrator's voice - presumably Khale's - says that school is bullshit. And that's not any kind of pay-off for the animation. You spend all this time getting him to school, and when he gets there, it's over. Why is he hooked? What's the twist at the end of the episode? From a narrative standpoint, there's nothing that makes me go, "Man, I need to see what happens," nor is there any moment of conclusion or discernible end. It just stops with a voice that isn't Khale's, but is.

Your animation is beautiful as usual, but again, I can't give full points there as the pacing is way off. it seems like there are too many moments of comparative slow-ness for this to be a fun, fast-paced little adventure. It's as if the Matrix were to have bullet time in every other shot. It wouldn't work, and it would get boring fast. There's a lot of that in this.

In any case, perhaps your attention would be better diverted to Gangsta Bean 2 or something... Or perhaps a Khale video game, where the story isn't so paramount to the piece.

Anyway, good work, just needs a few tweaks to pacing and story. Cheers.

--WF

LeafWorthy responds:

Very good crits, I can't really argue with any of them, but a 6? Really? That seems a lil harsh...

pretty good

well spoken...no?

No doubt this was good, but ...

to me your main character khale remainded me a bit too much of disneys tarzan by looks. also the way they moved and interacted plus the scenery where this took place remainded me of the bitey of brakenwood series. sorry to say this, because after all you did put effort into it and it is good, but definitly not original. which is a shame because with potential like that you could make something really good ... just maybe not copy of someone else next time.

LeafWorthy responds:

Or perhaps you're over simplifying the similarities.

Satans Critic.

Fairly alright, i liked the setting...trees.....with flying trees as cars (so long as someone with juju was flying it). and the originality level was decent as well. but the sound could of been better timed and a smoother ending would of been better.

Sound: 6/10
Style:8/10
Voiceover: 7/10
Story: 6/10

I hope to see more of you soon. and good luck

Very Pretty.

4.36 / 5.00 (+ 0.000049)

For the sake of the time and the tedious artwork that went into this animation I give you a 5 on the 1-5 scale, but I have complaints.

The movies are too short, they don't really explain much and the sound isn't all that great. I'd like to see more plot outline for the characters as the series progresses. There's a slight booming effect on the voices like maybe the voice-overs were taken too close to a mic. The music change in this one was a little off but other than that... Great job and keep up the good work.