ugh...
not the best of work...
Reviews for "Conditions2: Consequences"
DJJ-asshole responds:
Not the best of all reviews...
Well.
It was ok. Not great. But you obviously put a lot of thought into it, and time and care etc.
The drawing ability, wasn't bad... But wasn't outstanding either.
And it's "To Be Continued" not "Concluded"
DJJ-asshole responds:
Mr. D or DrM or whatever,
"To be continued" is a synonym for "To be concluded".
It's like saying "it's vagina, not pussy".
Nothing new or amazing
It was.. alright i guess. The acting was pretty lame and the voices were weird and at some points annoying. Plot is pretty much unoriginal i'm pretty sure i've seen the same kind of thing tens of thousands of times before. But your drawings are alright.
Ways to improve are probably to get more/a better voice actor and to get a decent plot thats fairly original.
come on,
I think you should spend less time fapping to hentai and more time putting some actual plot structure into your flash. The animation is fine but it is pretty apparent that your story is lacking in ingenuity. And yes, the glove thing may not have been done before but aside from that, the story seems like every other typical cop story I've seen.
Flaws
-the device is too powerful... (he is basically a god) by having an unbeatable weapon on the "good" side, you set up a story that is already bound to be completely uninteresting since there is no contest.
-you haven't really developed any characters...
-he could have saved his wife in an unfathomable amount of ways- I would have just created a baseball sized tumor in the "bad" guys head.... or make a diamond shield between her and the enemy... or make an extremely powerful magnet that would snatch away the gun or... or fill the gun with cheese.. etc.
-you spend all this time developing why the glove can't be taken unless under very specific circumstances when you could have just had it under the control of the "boss" (it seems like you are flaunting your "scientific" knowledge of adrenaline... why not heart rate, sweat, or any other simpler means of tension detection)
-the device would never be trusted to some agent or cop, more likely it would be in hands of scientists in some secret dwelling
Anyways, reason why I wrote this much is because I hate to see someone waste their time on something so ludicrous (which I am probably doing by writing this... meh). You should start over, you do the animating (which I'll say again is good, probably the only reason why you have a decent score), I do the script... (jks). And please don't respond by saying the next episode is going to be better... or have some sort of explanation, because there is nothing you can do that will rectify your mistakes... except starting over.
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DJJ-asshole responds:
I am aware of the faults in the storyline; but that's how the story is.
Can't comprehend why people always whine about "no character development" or "plot".
I just tell a story I like, if you don't like it, that's your problem, no one needs to blame me for that.
That's my way of telling a story. Let's say, the story is an excuse for me to animate.
There is also no point in telling me to animate or not, let's describe it in the language you would understand: your review is as worthless as my story.
You also need to understand, the device is no thing that can manipulate an object out of nothing... It just uses the atom to create something out of the same material, but in another form.
Bragging about adrenaline? Oh come on... That's so ridiculous, it seems like you're looking up to me like if I'm a genius. You said it yourself, it's nothing that special, why would I be cocky about something like that?
Wouldn't you say the same if I had used heartbeat?
Nevertheless, I WILL improve on the movies, but I need time, meaning that I need more episodes.
Interesting Premise
The whole idea is kind of ludicrous, with the ability to freely manipulate atoms (in a totally free and unrestricted definition such as episode 1's) in such a small package, with an (apparently) unlimited power supply is essentially having the power of God. There's no reason they had to try to negotiate with the criminal, they could have simply manipulated a few grams of anything around him to near-light speeds and killed him instantly, OR reduced him to air, or lime jell-o, or '68 corvette, you get the idea... Also, the whole drama and over-acted voices are kind of cheesy, I can almost see that the characters want to speak in Japanese so this could simply be a badly-dubbed kung-fu flick.
The whole idea behind it is pretty cool, i guess, but delivery is ridiculous, the animation is sub-par, the dramatic music is overdone, and the voice acting is cheeser than a block of cheesy cheese.