You had the right idea...what happened?
You had a good idea, but it seemed like you tried to use too much too fast. That is, your style seemed to irrationally jump from one area to another with no transition or rational thought which made the flash seamless. I would work on giving more of a logical flow to your animation, and try to give your jokes a little more flair. Also, I would take out the option for the user to direct the text, and simply animate the thing (makes everything take longer than it should).
You certainly have a good grasp of character design and final fantasy; I'd give another FF6 flash a try before you move on.
-bboychops