The arm bone's connected to the...
Hehe. I like they way the driver's arms don't come out of his shoulders, and by 'like' I mean 'giggle at'. If it's deliberate then it's a cute stylistic affectation =)
Otherwise an ok animation. Short and not overly sweet. Subject matter not particularly interesting unless it's directly relevant to the viewer, I guess. Didn't do much for me.
To put it simply, charvers make me want to pull out my own small intestines so that I can wrap them around fat, charverish necks and strangle the soulless life out of them. As for the arms...it was, of course, deliberate....whether or not you choose to actually believe that is up to you. It really is a surprise that animations that involve scything down the scum of society do not arouse you. Note to self: try harder next time.
Anyway, thanks for the good review!
I agree with the prev post
The thought was nice but it did not come as a shock to me. You need to improve on your storyline. And also, look at yourself in the mirror without your shirt and study how the bones are connected and move. Unless the guy was a hunched back, it did not look very real. Just practice drawing human figures and you will get better. Hope this was constructive enough!
The storyline was fine, it was meant to be short and a slight parody of the "Think!" adverts shown on UK television appliances. Thanks for the advice on the whole arms and limbs issues, I'll be sure to at least give those methods a fair shot.
Thanks for the constructive review!
A great message, in a funny way.
Given the fact that this is a road safety message, you have portrayed it well, but at the same time in a humorous way. My initial thoughts on this was that it doesn't hold a very strong message due to the fact that it IS funny instead of serious. The main reason for this is that car accidents aren't funny, although this could be just years of messages biased a negative and serious way talking.
The overall animation was done well, you have put effort into little details to make the movie better illustrated. Also the car interior was drawn with enough detail that you could see exactly what was going on, which was a great plus in your case. I loved how the noose come down in that suicidal song too.
There were a few things that got me though, more on a real world type of view.
Firstly the window on the inside of the car, the front one especially you had drawn with a series of straight lines. I don't know if this was intentional or not but it would have looked much better drawn with a single curved line. Again a lot of the other pieces of the car interior were drawn with straight lines, again they would have all benefited. Also another little note on the front drivers window, it wasn't really stretching as far forward as one in any car would, just a little something I picked up on.
Secondly, when he turns up the volume he turns it to the left. Personally I have never seen a system, in any circumstances from household amps to PA amps or car audio where the volume goes up when the knob is turned to the left. So that little issue kind of bugged me a bit as it would have been just as easy to animate it the other way.
Thirdly, when he steps out of the car initially he is on the passenger side of the car (being Britain). I understand he could have walked to that side but the way his reaction come up and the way he was standing next to the engine bay signified he had just stepped out.
Those are just a few that really stuck out at me. Overall the movie and animation was good but I would just make sure of little things like that in the future as they can really put a negative spin on a movie.
It was alright...
i gave it a 2/5 as i see that you are actually trying, but I did'nt get the joke, and the animation was a bit crude.
If you can get used to drawing good arms though you would have a pretty good animation going.
anyway, I see that you have potential and good luck =)
"Charver" = "Gangsta" or, to a lesser degree, "Jock", if you are from America. Unfortunately, the joke is the crux of the entire animation, so if you do not get it, then the animation holds no value at all. Still, thanks for the encouragement - the arm thing has plagued me for what seems to be an eternity.
Thanks for the good and surprisingly constructive review!
not bad
I did get it...but others outside UK might not quite understand the whole chav issue
Exactly. But then again, I doubt many Americans would understand it even when put in context, as it doesn't involve jokes of a phallic or crude nature. Still, we live in elitist hope over here in Great Britain...
...anyway, thanks for the good review!