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That was... rather different from "Pick Up: Act 1" and what probably threw a lot of people off was the sudden change in scenery (and the significant time gap between the two episodes didn't really help either). Other than that, anyone whom has seen the original one could of picked up where you left off. There was a little bit of a problem with the voices fading in and out, making some of the dialog very hard to hear. I liked the constant comedy that was going on-- even during the fight, it's become like a trademark of your writing. Anyways, nice job on it, I really think it blows away the original.
P.S. Why is that most of the fights you make always end up with the protagonist without her shirt? Just wondering...