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not bad, not bad
Reviews for "Haphazard Episode 1"
Lub Gerald
"Great, keep it up..."
"Gerald rocks." =D
wo wo weee waaa
very nice the script i thought could of been funnier like some outher reviews said but i like storys with cliff hangers so0o0o0o0o plz plz plzzzzzzzzzzz make a new one i want to see what happed to them lol.
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i liked the corkiness of this cartoon. Some bits actually looked really professionally done, really well animated and the style is unique. however, I wish there was more explanation to the story instead of "he just got there, this is _____, etc" i think the humurous bits got really stale really quickly...and when the characters broke the 4th wall and started interacting with the offscreen voice, it just fell apart. The animation was amazing to look at, characters are interesting enough but you just need more development from them and better WRITING. The dialogue is pretty lame, no offense...ampy up the story, make things happen. I hope the next installment greatly improves upon this one!
Looks great, but disappoints otherwise.
Sitting through this was kind of depressing.
I reeeally wanted to enjoy it, and could tell just how much time and effort had gone into the art and animation, but as beautifully fluid as the visual atmosphere and character animations were at times, this production seemed to fall flat in virtually everything else it attempted.
With no specifically memorable lines of dialogue throughout, the story writing is uninspiring and and stagnant, in addition to being riddled with poor grammar, spelling mistakes, and all around disappointing sentence structure, making it all the more difficult to follow along with.
I understand the need to spend time introducing the characters, but this was very much drawn out in its execution, and did very little to maintain viewer interest. Though I did find the scene featuring the cyclops performing as a jester to be rather amusing.
In regards to voice work, much like writing, when it doesn't fit, it only hurts the overall production rather than helping it.
Rodrigo is an extremely talented musician, and a decent voice actor when he works in Spanish, à la "Crow's Life", however, he simply CANNOT work in an English style.
His pronunciation, pacing, and word emphasis were all consistently off, clearly showing that he doesn't yet have a good enough understanding of the english language to deliver humor to such an audience. Breathing directly into the microphone and relying on obvious pitch editing to achieve voice distinction are also good ways to suck the life out of a performance.
William Arbuckle was passable as the narrator. I do like a British voice being used, though he could stand to be a bit more powerful and exaggerated in his characterization. Though in this production as a whole so far, you can do much better in terms of overall casting, as a number of reviews have already stated.
I certainly commend you on dropping the TMNT crutch of your previous animations, in favor of more original character designs, but in doing so, you've also dropped a large fraction of your viewership base: TMNT fans who enjoyed watching the turtles do mindlessly stupid things. All too similar to the huge dropoff from viewers of the "Mixed in Balamb" series.
You won't be able to attract much of a new audience with simply more of the same, minus the TMNT focus. You're going to have to compensate for that loss by making far better productions than REBELS in all regards, including more appealing and memorable characters, working together with strong and well delivered dialogue.
Otherwise, you may find the Haphazard series positioned as a production that's beautiful to look at ...and not much else.