Congratulations on a fine piece
Truely one of the greatest parts of a spectacular Anime. I've never seen that Episode in English, so that was also a good experience for me. That one poem probably represents Rei's inner struggle throughout the rest of the series.
Good work with this one, and all you Evangelion haters can go back to jacking off in your basements watching Pokemon or something. If you can't handle an Anime that goes beyond physical violence or chibiness, then you might as well just retake the 4th grade. Evangelion is a work of art, so don't be dissing it...