Dialogue.
You're dialogue need's faster pacing and more focus to keep it interesting. What was the point of the sprites being so small? If you had zoomed in on them and drawn new ones over top with Flash, you'd have an easy, simple and effective style.
yea, i would have made them talk faster, but some people on newgrounds...well..arent quite speed reader if u know what i mean. i can read alot faster, but i know that others cant.
thanks for the reveiw!
Nice story
I liked the story, but the graphics were pretty bad. Nice try though.
thanks. i know the graphix arent the greatest, but they'll be better in my next one.
i want this to be blammed
but . . . i guess it was good
sorry dude, but it didnt get blammed....
Good writing but spritdom brought it down
I think you had a good idea but you need help on the art part. Brought it down considerably.
Not interesting to look at.
yea, well, if i'd have drawn it myself it woulda been 10 times worse...
thanks for taking the time to reveiw.
First
Well, I can't say it's my favorite out there, but I think there were some good ideas in it. I think you could have potential. Keep making the movies and improving the style. I'd say it's a not bad first submission. Now try to wow us with the next one.
well i wasnt expecting it to be anybody's favorite, but there is one guy who has it as number 5 on his fav list, which i didnt expect...
my next cartoon is underway. keep a lookout for it, it should be good.
thanks for taking the time to reveiw my entry.