dude
um....you need work, i mean, SERIOUS work, this could have been fantastic if you used the right programs for the job... im sure that this took you a while to make, and i commend you for trying, however i feel that you should have taken a bit longer, found the right art programs (such as Adobe, or anything with layering abilities), possibly make the screen larger so that people can read and see what is there, and download either better music or better software for music.
On your next project, work harder, i know you can do better :)
And dont sweat it, if at first you dont succeed, try, try again... :D