Hmm
I was kind of confused about this. It is rather annoying to read so much, maybe you could have spoken the words to the viewer in some other way. Also there wasn't much similarity in style from scene to scene more like random works if that makes any sense.. although it is a start, I look forward to seeing if it continues...
Needs more work
Too much reading, and also there were quite a few gramatical errors.
This shouldnt be on newgrounds.....
Go to fanfiction.com and post this. This is a place for flash movies!!! In other words, ITS TOO FUCKIN BIG!!!!
Would be better as text file
There is no reason for this being a flash animation.
It's just text, why dont you make it a nice 1k .txt file instead of a cracking 3612k flash file....
Bollocks..
errr
well i did like the opening story but its all text and i cannot fairly give you a high score, youve got your 1.5 now put in some animation and itll be even higher.