better than my first flash
didn't really understand what was going on tho - I'm sure there's more of a story there... but I did like it.
Reviews for "my frist flash"
Very good
That can't be your first flash right? O_O Wow. Nice, make it longer and it'll own! Song:- Linkin Park - P5hing Me Aw*y
V. Good =D
Wow
Well I just had a very long review that was deleted so I'll try to reassemble it because you deserve it.
First off, I watched this flash twice so that I could give you a comprehensive review so I'd give this one a little more weight than any of the others you're going to get.
Ok so take the criticism lightly. It's just trying to point you in the right direction, not scold you. Everyone can improve, but knowing what to improve is for what user reviews are writen.
Very good job for a first time flash. Your art is what I want to achieve for my first submission if I ever get the time. Like I said, I watched it twice. I came here before the other flash under judgement thinking it would be a quick blam and it wasn't because I was genuinely impressed.
First, and I know you're going to hear this in most of the reviews because it's true, this is too short. It's great for it's length, but the best scores come with some lenght. The short load is nice, but short flashes only work if they're extremely funny right from the start.
Second, in your opening scene the idea of movement wasn't strong enough. All we have to tell us we're moving is the background and the two signs when the whole scene should give us the right cues. This is where you're artistic creativity can truly flourish. Try to mix it up a little. Two signs on the same side of the road? (In the US, where this site is based the signs are usually on the opposite side of the road unless it's two lanes, which you can't tell from the art.) Add some stuff. If this is really a two lane road then there will be lines down the middle, and most roads have irregularities at the very least.
Third, you should always have a plot. Even the worst flash can capture the imagination if it's got a good plot. The violence in this flash is just random without any kind of concept to frame it. Good scores accompany well thought out plots.
Fourth, it never hurts to practice your art. I like your style as it is, but this is your first flash and I'm sure with all the positive feedback you're sure to get that you're going to want to continue so you've got plenty of time ahead of you. Don't stress about it. Just chip away at it and you'll progress naturally.
Fifth and finally, the choice in music was good. It was a little soft, but that's nothing people can't fix with their volume. Make sure you pay attention to this important aspect in your future work.
Now for something outright good. I like that you did this in Black and White. If people are telling you to go to color and you don't want to, don't listen to them. Look at Madness. It's one of the most popular series around and it's in B&W.
If you can, change the name of the flash.
Keep up the good work and feel free to contact me for input and advice about anything you're doing in the future. I also do voice acting. You can reach me at my gmail account of using AIM at FatherVenom.
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first flash... impossible. how could this have only been your first flash. i made like 10 flashes before i got any good.
Yay...
I like that for your first flash you did good.
What was that song?
Also, you should make it longer and put a replay button.
Good job!