On your way..
TO HELL! Just kidding. Haha. This movie shows great promise and you have some great skills. I'm sure if you got flash you could make this video 200X better.
First off the jokes were quite funny, and your style is also good.
Only things I see here that are not as good are the sounds.. But hey 20 bucks and boom a better microphone. Be sure to move your mouth back as you do your "p's" and "s's" so you can remove any popping in sound. Also, go to your advanced settings under your mic settings and make sure Microphone boost is on to get all the loudness into the comp.
But other than that great work and I hope to see more from you!
-AClockWorkMep