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Not bad, Not bad at all. You could have had some music in there though. And.. the story just goes too fast. Try to add more onto it like.. instead of saying, "Hey, we found your dad's killer. Come on down!" say um.., "Hey, there's a place down cooper street where this guy knows something about your father's killer." And try to add in why he killed the father. Get what I'm sayin'? I've only created about 5 flash movies and I don't intend on sumbitting them on newgrounds. But, I do write novels and books. If you need any help with creative storyline.. I'm the one to talk to.one more thing, check out my music and see if any of it would fit in your next movie.
Your friend, ßosa