Can be imrpoved...
For your first flash, I was amazingly impressed. I absolutly loved the music, and loved the feel of the flash. I think if you improve upon your drawings, which aren't terrible, but can definitly be made better, you can become an amazing flash artist.
You have the stamina, and you have the story lines and the feel of a good flash movie, but you just need to tweak it a little bit.
Great job man, I can't wait to see more.