It was ok
I didn't like the music for this and I hate clock voices, but the clip looked good.
Reviews for "The Portal 1"
StealthBeast responds:
Ya i struggled w/ the music rofl.
I hated the clock voice also but what can I do? it's their voice.
kinda neat
sure, the matrix, teh intarweb (and hence, newgrounds) go together like peas and carrots.
good character choices, i think you did a top notch job on the sound (great choice for the music loop, and nice job on the clock voice), it was a sharp looking and well directed peice... until you obviously ran out of patience with this slice of the story and did... i dunno what. man, wtf happened after the diving off the rooftop scene?? when did you decide that that horrible awful stairway deserves to even be in this animation?? what happened with the phone scene (it stalls there for a few seconds, there's no tension, it looks like the movie is broken)??
dialogue, well, needs work. you go and make an explicit references to the portal at the beginning ("all your SWFs are dead"), and then just start taking snippets from the matrix script (which was an awful script... so not a good idea to directly copy from in the first place). spelling stuff correctly, well, *shrug* it would be more representative if you were comedically liberal with your usages or something, but having the clock with the only voice is kinda weird (get some friends to do some voice acting for you or something, who wouldn't want to be a cartoon movie star??).
the rooftop scene was just really really good. i'm very disappointed to see that you rushed the last 3 scenes so bad, knowing that even if you'd just taken (as you did for the skyline of the rooftop scene) a picture and used it as a backdrop instead of a bunch of brown lines for a stairway, or a totally grey backdrop for a payphone and a truck, or worst a blankly white background with a bannana and a chair... well, it would have improved things significantly.
i really hope you don't sell the next chapter short. pretty good stuff.
StealthBeast responds:
I didn't rush the last scenes, in fact those are the scenes i worked the hardest in.
I lack a skill required in animating. Drawing. I had no clue how to draw that stairway, i just... drew lol
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Very good motion blur effect on trinity. Where'd u learn to do that?
And nice preloader bar. But trinity's voice is crap.
StealthBeast responds:
omg that was not trinity.
Thats strawberry clocks voice being heard through the phone.
Supposedly, sticks arent supposed to have voices, but "the one" can develop one.
I use a different type of method on my blur effects, hard to explain.
you copy the frames you want to blurr, then paste them in an object. you then go back to the scene and take the object and fade it. put the object 1 or 2 frames after to starting frame of the object. its hard to explain.
nyeh
Not really that great, but still worth a look. I guess with so many matrix parodies around, it`s hard to say good things about ones you see recently.
StealthBeast responds:
Ya i used to have a nice storyline for this thing but then i realised it was used once b4 and i might as well dump it cause everyone'll call me a theif =/
Let matrix alone.
Animation is ok, but work more in the background. Ah, one more thing .....dont u think its enough of matrix stuff?
StealthBeast responds:
Ya its just I have such an original idea I couldn't possibley hold it in =P