Nice
I really liked it, i agree with the guy below me about tempo changes. I think that you have somthing here but you just haven't really "hit your stride" You just need tp find a song where everyone in you band loves and wants to make better and is willing to work really hard to get it. On a more critisizing note, i think your singer needs to put more emotion in his voice, he is hitting all the notes really well and all but, it can get a little boring, especially with a longer song like this. I think that the overall piece was well done, but your still a little rough around the edges. Overall i liked it, you have a good sound, it dosen't stay the same which is a mistake a lot of people make, your original, and you have potential. Altogether its a good song but i wouldn't download it, but then again this isn't really my main focus of what i like to listen to (gunge and metal) so thank you for a good listen.
Simon