READ THIS BEFORE YOU WATCH! This is my first movie submition to Newgrounds, excluding my movie Ghost Town, which some of you may remember (I posted that as a joke). This is the real deal. My graphics aren't the best, so I don't expect a great rating on that. Don't be so quick to call it a piece of crap right away either, give it a chance, there's some funny parts nearer the end. Sometimes, my narrating voice can be off, sometimes a little, sometimes alot, but it's there. This character is one my cousin Tony made up (based on a drawing I made). This movie is based on the hero's baby years. Enjoy!
Hank
grr...
i couldlnt finish watching is cause i just happened to be in my grandparents house when on newgrounds, and they herd the lady screaming and thought i was watching porn, and i couldnt turn it down cause the narrator was to quiet compaired to the other voices....
less "OHHH oHHoOOohOOOhHHOO!!" next time
tis woz OK
tis woz ok but the sound wz a bit loud nd the narration woz super quiet, i had 2 keep turin my hifi up nd down. overall not too bad, try 2 use text and actionscript to make the subtitles luk as if there being typed out, it saves time and keyframes.
the scores are not accurate, but close
dude, this was lame. period.
paintbrush
Ok, nice try and I see you put alot of effort into this but to be honest it was rather dull.
Ok . . . explanation
I'm sorry, kid, I had to blam this one. Let me explain why:
Flash Elements: Parts of it look like you did it all in one layer, which doesn't EVER look good. The audio of the narration was really quiet while the audio of the screaming and such was REALLY LOUD! I know its kind of hard to control that with the audio controls in MX, but you're going to have to fix that sooner or later. The graphics were lacking . . . at best . . . Sometimes you used the circles/rectangles tools and sometimes you hand drew the stuff. I realized, while doing my second flash, that you can't have a combination of computer generated and hand drawn things. You should pick one style or the other is going to stick out like a sore thumb.
Film elements:
I don't care about these charecters when they are children! I want to know about what they did when they grew up! I want some real story! What happened to Target Man after the other kid stuck him with the dart!?! Did he bleed? Did his mom come out and slap the other kid? WHAT HAPPENED?!?!?! In the beginning, it never really explained how he got these powers. Was there some space radiation? Did that meteor thing have weird extraterrestrial chemical compounds in it that affected the Earth's pull of gravity on him? Or did he have these powers from birth? (What's a baby doing on a space ship anyway?)
In general, I think that you could rework this and resubmit when you get a lot more practice with this flash stuff.
That's one thing I forgot to mention in my movie. The meteor had "extraterrestrial chemical compounds" that did it. Some of the other stuff is supposed to remain unanswered, though and will be answer in the cartoons following. I'll take your advice on the drawing thing and I'll stick with one style. I think I'll do freestyle. Works better for me.
Hank