YIKES!

Hey kid, your graphics are drawn well-for the most part, but you need better music. The plot? What plot? It sickens me to think there is a 1-3 of these. PLEASE work on this!

Close But Not There Yet

Hey, Yo.
I can tell you have mad skills , kid..
But your story didn't make sense..
And it was waaaaay to long.
But I'm giving you props for huge effort..
Just be ready for the rest of new grounds to beat you up bad for making this short..
They can be rough..
Please believe that.. I know..